My goals in revision for my essay is to revise my introduction paragraph in order to makes sure I fully preview what I will talking about in my essay and that I keep my personal opinions out it and save it for discussion on Zander and Southan. I also plan to restructure thoughts that make sense to me, the person who has spent time reviewing and analyzing these sources, and make sure they make sense to those who know nothing…
Not often in high school did we do peer editing. When we did, it was to find the weak points in our essay and look for grammatical errors. So, this was a completely new experience for me and I loved it. I learned new techniques of how to argue claims and back them up. I saw the other writers using the different ways to convey a point over. One relied heavily on visualization, but she did it in a way…
Reflecting on Nicole B’s work was very eye opening. I don’t often get to read other peoples essays regarding the same topic because we simply just didn’t do that in high school. So, getting to see how someone else rights was very nice. I got to read and experience another persons thought process for myself. It also helped to give me some ideas for myself. Nicole didn’t specifically start out with a personal anecdote, she used an experience she noticed…
In Rhy Southan’s, “Is Art a Waste of Time,” Southan is going on a trip with some people from the Effective Altruism. These people believe in helping the less fortunate at all costs and believe that the money being put into music, art, theatre, and film, is a waste as it does not help the less fortunate. This is unfortunate for Southan as he is going away on a little trip to finish writing a film script, so these people…
After learning about what the Effective Altruism (EA) actually does and want and learning about them in class and in discussion, I reread Southan’s essay even more critically than I did before. I made many comments expressing my confusion about where the author stood and what he was talking about. But after reading about what the Effective Altruism stands to do, I finally understood what Southan was aiming to talk about. My confusion, however, turned into taking a stand on…
A good deed is more than just the needy – Well, they are! While the needy may be more important, I believe that anything done to help others is considered a good deed. Not all of us are able to help the needy. What if we are the needy? Don’t we still have a responsibility to the society to do good deeds. In my opinion, yes you do. A good deed is just letting someone cut in willingly, holding doors…
